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More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in foreign countries. ​ Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks?

#students #study #colleges #universities #countries
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 of students that are choosing to do their
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 degrees abroad. I am convinced that the benefits of it outweigh the drawbacks. The major advantage of studying abroad is the quality of education, which is significantly higher compared to local universities and colleges.
Furthermore
, students, by studying in
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 country, will become more responsible and mature, due to the fact that parents are no longer around them and they need to take care of themselves. These conditions will lead to
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 of competitive and qualified specialists with soft skills. The increasing number of « Bolashaq» studying abroad programme graduates in administrative posts can be a convincing example of that.
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, there are some disadvantages of studying abroad,
such
 as human capital flight or simply brain drain. Mostly, talented and intelligent students are able to get higher education in foreign institutions.
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 fact causes an issue in developing countries
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 because some gifted youngsters prefer staying in developed countries with ready conditions rather than returning back and bringing their expertise and experience to the homeland. The rate of migration out of developing middle Asia regions at a young age can serve as an example
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 brain drain. I would like to state that despite the presence of disadvantages of obtaining a higher education degree in foreign countries, they are outweighed by positive sides like
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the quality
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 of academic knowledge and skills.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cross-cultural understanding
  • Specialized courses
  • Personal growth
  • Financial strain
  • Tuition
  • Cultural differences
  • Isolation
  • Homesickness
  • Educational systems
  • Academic performance
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