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Transport preferences among young people From different countries

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 depicts the percentile preferences of the means of
transportation
 among young
people
 in Great
Britain
,
USA
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the USA
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, Germany and
France
. Overall, it can be seen that the percentage of young
people
 who uses
car
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the car
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 as a preferred means of movement was high in
France
, Great
Britain
 and
USA
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the USA
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To begin
, most young
people
 in
France
, Great
Britain
, and
USA
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the USA
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 preferred
car
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a car
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 as a means of
transportation
,
however
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France
 had the highest percentile of young
people
 who used
car
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a car
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 as a means of movement in
USA
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the USA
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 and Great
Britain
 the percentile was equal. Other means of
transportation
 in the aforementioned countries Bicycle was high in Great
Britain
 followed by
France
 while
USA
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 had the lowest
In
contrast
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 bicycle was the most preferred means of
transportation
 in Germany while
car
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the car
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 was the
second
 preferred means of
transportation
.
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