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Transport preferences among people from different countries

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The most preferred means of
transportation
 for
youth
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the youth
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 of 4 different nations
was
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 presented using a bar chart with its measurement as
percentage
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a percentage
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. Overall,it can be seen clearly that
car
 is the highest amongst France,United States of America and Great Britain.
However
, in Germany,
bicycle
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the bicycle
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 is their greatest means of
transportation
.
To begin
, France
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,U S
A
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and Great Britain had
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a car
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car
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cars
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 as their most liked ways of
transportation
. In France,
car
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the car
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 has the highest among other means at the rate above 70% with its least as
motorcycle
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a motorcycle
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 at 10%,
similarly
, Great Britain and
USA
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 preferred
car
 as their
most used
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 at exactly 60%, motorcycle at 10% for the former and 30% for the later while
bicycle
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the bicycle
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 is at 30% and 10% respectively.
In contrast
, Germany liked moving around
with
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bicycle
 the most. At about 45% Germany preferred moving about
with
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bicycle
 followed by
car
 at 40% and motorcycle as their least means of
transportation
 at about 15%.
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