Children are now less active in their free time than in the past. Therefore, sports lessons must be compulsory in school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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As compared to past generations, children now are physically inactive in their leisure time.

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I agree that sporting events are vital in a child’s all-around educational development, I would argue that

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schemes should be optional

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of mandatory. To start with the benefits of physical activities, one can get a healthy body and mind. Take the case of a schoolboy who participates in one sport in the schoolhouse can get rid of the potential risks of diseases

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as diabetes, obesity or more dangerously heart attack. By

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, I mean that a child can build physical strength and stamina by relieving stress and putting down the burdens of studying in the classroom context. I

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remember taking part in physical education every other day in an educational institution was really pleasurable and helped me to concentrate in the classroom context.

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sporting hours are vital for school-age children, I do not believe that

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educational programs must be mandatory. Making these programs compulsory in schools may result in unfair decisions and bad behaviours could emerge in a group of pupils who have no interest. The reason behind

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not every child is physically appropriate to carry on sport. Only suitable and willing students can take part

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the optional stream of playful activities. In conclusion, physical exercises might offer a range of benefits to children including all-embracing educational progress, I do have a firm belief that

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activities should elective part of the curriculum

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of obligatory.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

251 words

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Children are now less active in their free time than in the past. Therefore, sports lessons must be compulsory in school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

These days, many people in western countries are obese. What are the causes and solutions of this problem?

There are benefits to studying abroad, at least for part of one’s higher education. All students should try to include at least one year of a study-abroad program in their university or college education.

Some species of animals are almost extinct; and many others seem to be fast approaching a similar risk. What are the reasons for this? What should be done to solve this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

.In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. .What are reasons for this? .How people can research this?