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One of your friends lives in another country.you want to spend some time working in that country. Write a letter to your friend. Describe why you want to work in that country. Tell him about your skills and experience. As some other questions related to work.

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Dear Robert, I hope
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 letter finds you in good health and you are doing well. I am writing
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 letter to express my interest in working in
Australia
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as well as
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 some queries relating to the expected
job
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. As you know I have been working in a multinational company as a supply chain coordinator since 2022.
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, I have a plan to move to
Australia
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 for work purposes as I believe that my current
job
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 knowledge will meet the required qualifications for working in a country like
Australia
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.
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, I have obtained a master's degree majoring in supply chain management and I have more than three years
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 experience in
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 field.
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, I have a good command of computer literacy , particularly Microsoft Office packages. As you have been living in
Australia
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 since 2020, I think you are the right person to get the information relating to my expected
job
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 abroad.
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, I am expecting some information about the
job
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 confirmation policy
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 working hour rules in Australian private companies. I look forward to hearing from you soon regarding my queries. Yours lovingly, Tector
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph contains a single, clear idea. The second paragraph could be broken down into two: one for your reasons to move, and another to discuss your qualifications and experience.
task achievement
Be specific about your skills and experience. Mention some key achievements or particular projects you've worked on that are relevant to the jobs you're seeking.
coherence cohesion
End your letter with a question or a statement that invites a reply, to encourage a response from your friend. For example, 'Could you provide some advice on where to start my job search?'
task achievement
Expand on your queries related to work, such as asking about the culture or specific details like salary expectations or the best job search platforms to use.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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