In many countries traditional customs are being lost. Why do you think this is a what can parents and schools do to keep traditional customs alive ?

It has become a concerning fact that some traditional
customs
have disappeared in many countries.I would
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elucidate
some causes
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accounted
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for
this
problem and propose some efforts that parents and schools can make
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together
toghether
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together
to contribute to the preservation of traditional
customs
. It is the social responsibility of
young
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generation
to carry on the traditional
customs
but they tend to have little acknowledgement.There are two major key factors attributed
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consequence.
Firstly
,
technology
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advancement has made people ,especially
young
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generation
, exposed to excessive information and cultures of foreign countries, which is quite appealing to the young
generation
as they have comparatively more curiosities at their forming age.
For example
, in China, young people know how to prepare a
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dinner meal as they learned a lot from the media
such
as TV,
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TikTok
and
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Instagram
but they
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barely
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can prepare a traditional spring festival family gathering.
Secondly
, people generally live a busy life because of their vocational and personal
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, which leads to less quality time spent with their families.
This
makes it even harder for the elder members of the families to pass on their knowledge of traditional
customs
. To tackle
this
problem, there are some actions that could be taken at home and school. Parents could talk about traditional values and festivals at home and
family
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gathering
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; they could
also
arrange more related activities
such
watch some movies of strong conventional
customs
with their
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children
chilren
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children
.
This
creates more
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opportunities
oppurtunities
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opportunities
to acquire knowledge of traditional
customs
. As for education
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institutions
istitutions
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institutions
, they could
also
introduce some lessons about traditional festivals and
customs
Moreover
, the schools could ask the students to complete some extra-curricular projects involving traditional
customs
. With both the efforts made together by parents and school, it will be beneficial to
conservation
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of the traditional
customs
. In a nutshell, being overwhelmed by foreign
cultures
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information and lacking learning
oppurtnities
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opportunities
have
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lead
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to the disappearance of some traditional
customs
and I believe that
parent
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and school could work together to educate the young
generation
about the
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traditional
traditonal
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traditional
customs
for preservation.
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