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Education is not a luxury, but a basic human right and as such should be free for everyone irrespective of personal wealth. Do you agree or disagree?

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Being able to attain an
education
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 is a valuable thing that a person could ever have.
Education
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 is not a luxury, it is essential and should be a privilege to each individual no matter what their household
status
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 is. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss my stand that
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 should be subsidised for everyone despite
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the person’s wealth since it will benefit both the community and the economy if it will be provided to them. The main benefit of having every person educated is that it will help lessen the poverty in the community or the whole country. For
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 reason,
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 can
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 improve the economical
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 of the bigger aspect.
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,
people
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 who
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 an educational background will most likely
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get a job because it is a company’s requirement in order for them to hire an employee. Provided that these
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 will be hired from the jobs that they have applied
, they
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 will be able to generate income which can support their families. Clearly, if everyone
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 educated there will be more positive results that will give convenience to the community while slowly eradicating poverty.
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, the economy will have the advantage of improving its funds and generating more income if there will be a number of companies that will invest in places where they can get possible candidates who are educated or has an educational background to be their employee. As an example, investors will take the advantage of growing and building their companies which means that there will be more jobs
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people
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 and more taxes are paid to the government from the workers and from the companies.
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, the economical
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 will continue to rise while giving
people
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 a chance to be educated to get a job.
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 essay showed that if only
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 is not an option but a privilege for everybody there will be less poverty and a more
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 economy. In my opinion, the government should
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 it disregarding their household
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fundamental right
  • accessible
  • social mobility
  • personal and professional development
  • overall development
  • equality
  • social disparities
  • access
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