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Beside a lot of advantages, some people believe that the Internet creates many problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #internet
Aside from a number of advantages, many individuals believe that the
Internet
 generates some complications.In my opinion, I partially agree that because, in
this
 modern milieu, the net is crucial.
Firstly
,
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 for
people
 in their life.
Secondly
,
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some troubles which arise when using the
Internet
 a lot. On the one hand, in
this
 modern world, we can not imagine our life without
Internet
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 as it is the most vital worldwide system
among
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 the
people
.Obviously, there
are
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great
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 number of advantages of utilizing the net.
For instance
, the
Internet
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 rich
of
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information
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 base
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 everyone can find the details which depend on their study and
moreover
, they can master the new languages or other fields for free.In fact, currently, 5 billion
people
 use the
Internet
 around the world and all of them utilize it for
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purpose
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,
such
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 shopping, selling, making money,
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and communication
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communication
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 and
this
 is because the
Internet
 has become a significant resource for
people
.
On the other hand
, there are some disadvantages of using
Internet
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 a lot.It is true that
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most
people
 utilize it in
a
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 right way,
however
, there are
people
 who are using the
Internet
 for poisoning
people
’s minds.To illustrate, a lot of
people
 can be tracked by hackers or unauthorized
people
 and
as a result
, they can be harmful to them by stealing their personal information.Nowadays, the majority of
Internet
 users are being suffered these kinds of difficulties. To summarise, personally, we can learn many good things through using the
Internet
 only if we utilize it consciously.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • E-commerce
  • Consumer behavior
  • Virtual marketplace
  • Cybersecurity
  • Digital footprint
  • Return policy
  • Comparison shopping
  • Customer reviews
  • Retail therapy
  • Logistics
  • User interface
  • Payment gateway
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