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Increasing taxes would raise prices and lower consumption.

#taxes #prices #consumption
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IT IS COMMONLY BELIEVED THAT INCREASING TAXES WOULD CAUSE INFLATION AND
REDUCES
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 CONSUMPTION.
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 ESSAY WILL DISCUSS THE ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES BEFORE REACHING A CONCLUSION.
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,THE BENEFITS OF INCREASING TAX PER CENT CAN BE LOOKED INTO.
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 THERE ARE MANY ADVANTAGES TO
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 ACTION, BETTER INCOME SOURCES FOR THE GOVERNMENT
AS WELL AS
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 LESS DISPARITY BETWEEN RICH AND POOR ARE DEFINITELY SOME OF THE IMPORTANT ONES.THE COUNTRY CAN ENJOY A BETTER BUDGET IF THEY CAN MAKE THEIR CITIZEN PAY MORE .
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 , SPECIAL EMPHASIS SHOULD BE TAKEN TO ENSURE THAT ONLY THE WEALTHIER SECTION IS CHARGED MORE .
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 MAKING THE GOVERNING BODIES TAKE ACTION FOR THE WELFARE OF THE UNDERPRIVILEGED SOCIETY TO ENJOY A BETTER LIFE,EVENTUALLY WILL HELP IN REDUCING THE GAP BETWEEN LOW AND HIGH SOCIOECONOMIC CLASSES.
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 , THE NEW TAX REGIME BY THE MINISTRY OF FINANCE OF INDIA HAS A SYSTEM IN WHICH PEOPLE WHO MAKE MORE INCOME THROUGH VARIOUS MEANS ARE CHARGED MORE.
SECONDLY
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,THE NEGATIVE EFFECTS OF
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 STRATEGY.THOUGH
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 PROPOSAL WORKS WELL ON PAPER ,WE ALL ARE WELL AWARE THAT THE PRIVILEGED POPULATION WILL NEVER LET
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 HAPPEN BECAUSE THEY HAVE A BETTER INFLUENCE IN MAKING THESE PUBLIC POLICIES AND LAWS.
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 ,IT WOULD END UP
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INCREASING THE PRICES OF DAILY NEEDS .IN TURN ,
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 WOULD LEAD TO REDUCED PURCHASE OF OTHER GOODS.
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, FORMS AN EVEN MORE UNFAIR DISTRIBUTION OF MONEY ACROSS THE INDIVIDUALS.
FOR INSTANCE
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, THE PRESENT ECONOMIC CRISIS IN AMERICA IS
DUE TO
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 THESE KINDS OF HEFTY BILLS.
TO CONCLUDE
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 ,INCREASING THE SHARE OF TAX BY THE GOVERNING BODIES IS NOT
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GOOD NEWS FOR THE COMMON MAN.IT WOULD ONLY MAKE THINGS WORSE .
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task response
Develop arguments more effectively to provide a balanced view of advantages and disadvantages
coherence and cohesion
The essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion that summarize the main points and provide a clear stance on the topic
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