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Many people choose to work or live abroad because of the higher standards of living they can find outside their home country. Do you think this brings more advantages or disadvantages to the people who follow this path?

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Migration to live or work abroad has increased in some countries recently as the expectation for a better life is higher than in the past. I generally believe the cons of living abroad outweigh its pros. The
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 advantage of living abroad is building up new skills.
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 who go to a foreign country step out of their comfort zone. There is a chance to improve communication,social and networking skills.
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, living in a new place with new
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 and attractions
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 as the architecture of buildings, social gatherings and
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's interaction can open up minds and learn us how to respect the diverse opinions and they can visit new attractions that they might not have been there before.
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, living abroad has several drawbacks.
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 may encounter
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 shock as they have to adapt to a completely new
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 .
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, most
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 face financial challenges as they have to be familiar with a totally new financial system and paperwork it sometimes takes time to find a job . At
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 but not least, homesickness due to being far from friends,family members and even homecooked meals may make
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 feel isolated which leads to mental disorders
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 as depression in the long term. In conclusion,
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 some
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 living or working abroad is a good opportunity to increase the life quality, I believe there are too many obstacles
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 as
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 shock, financial conflicts and homesickness.
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