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Some people feel that the design of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by governments. Others believe those who finance the construction of a building should be free to design it as they see fit. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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In
this
 fast-paced world,
construction
 and architecture
has
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 made significant advances. There are others who ween that the authorities should control the
design
 of the new
construction
 project in huge cities. There are some others who reckon that the financier of the project should be set free in the aspects of
design
. In my point of view,
i
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 believe that the government should control the
design
 of the new apartments in big cities.
To begin
 with, some believe that the architecture of the new buildings should be controlled by the government.
This
 is because the
construction
design
 of the new buildings should follow the proper laws of the
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society
socity
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society
 and
environment
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.
Moreover
, it should have a proper height
less
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 than the threshold height of the land ,drainage system and septic tank in their building.
However
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 by making these in their
design
 the spread of virus and
desease
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disease
 are
contolled
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controlled
.
For instance
, in a recent survey, it is shown
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diseases
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deseases
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diseases
 are created from the buildings constructed by breaking the law of the
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government
goverment
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government
design
 in
drainage
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the drainage
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 system.
On the other hand
, some believe that investors of the building should be set free in their
design
of
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construction
. Nowadays, building our own home in the
design
 of our dream, is a great dream for everyone, while constructing that no one should
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control
controll
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control
 that.
Furthermore
, individuals are paying tax for the land, house, and every other
things
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 and
contrusting
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constructing
contrasting
 a building in their views so no one has the
rights
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right
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 to
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control
controll
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control
 the
design
 of the building.
For example
, in a recent survey, it is shown that the investors of the
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construction
constuction
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construction
 filed a legal complaint
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against
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aginst
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against
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 the government
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control
controll
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control
 in the
design
 aspects of the building. To sum up, the authorities should
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control
controll
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control
 only some parts of the
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design
desing
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design
 work
such
 as
height
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the height
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,
drainage
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and drainage
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 system of the building and the financier should set free in other parts of
design
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the design
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 of
interior
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the interior
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 and exterior work of the building.
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