Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people however think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Authorities believe that economic growth is
crucial
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aspect of development in every country.
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in
others
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opinion
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public
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and
education
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are other important areas that demonstrate how any
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is wealthy and progressed in the
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. There is growing evidence that public
health
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and
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have
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role in our
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. In terms of
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health
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care system, it is inevitable every country with
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member
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can progress
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lighting fast pace. High life expectancy
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happier
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society
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thus
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, mental disorders
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as depression decreased significantly as result, successful
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come
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after
healthier
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one. Invest in
education
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and the new generation is investing in the future. With practical training related to the needs of
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, progress is achieved in all sectors of
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, including the
economy
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.
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Germany put huge money recourse on
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with modern curriculums and now is one of the prominent
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economy
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centers
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in the world. On the other side, many municipals believe that
economy
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is a critical core of every
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society
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proration and the power of a nation is greatly dependent on its economic development. In my
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also
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, it is true economic growth is one of the most important
part
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of success, but other social factors including
education
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could affect every country the most. If governments allocate enough budgets
on
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education
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the education
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they will invest
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skilled
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workforce,
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a result
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result
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more development in
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society
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can happen. In conclusion,
although
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economy
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is
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aspect of every nation’s progress, various other factors directly affect the
economy
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such
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as public
health
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and practical
educations
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education
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. These are essential for
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next-generation
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next
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generation
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well-being.
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