Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people however think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both views and give your opinion
Authorities believe that economic growth is
crucial
aspect of development in every country. Add an article
a crucial
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others
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others'
other's
opinion
including Fix the agreement mistake
opinions
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mine
me
public Add a comma
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health
and education
are other important areas that demonstrate how any society
is wealthy and progressed in the long-term
.
There is growing evidence that public Correct your spelling
long term
health
and education
have crucial
role in our Add an article
a crucial
society
. In terms of health
care system, it is inevitable every country with Add an article
the health
healthier
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a healthier
member
can progress Fix the agreement mistake
members
with
lighting fast pace. High life expectancy Change preposition
at
cause
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causes
happier
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a happier
society
thus
, mental disorders such
as depression decreased significantly as result, successful society
come
after Change the verb form
comes
healthier
one. Invest in Correct article usage
a healthier
education
and the new generation is investing in the future. With practical training related to the needs of society
, progress is achieved in all sectors of society
, including the economy
. For
example
Germany put huge money recourse on Add a comma
,example
education
with modern curriculums and now is one of the prominent economy
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economic
centers
in the world.
On the other side, many municipals believe that Change the spelling
centres
economy
is a critical core of every society
proration and the power of a nation is greatly dependent on its economic development. In my Change noun form
society's
opinion
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,opinion
also
, it is true economic growth is one of the most important part
of success, but other social factors including Change to a plural noun
parts
education
could affect every country the most. If governments allocate enough budgets on
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to
education
they will invest Add an article
the education
on
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in
skilled
workforce, Add an article
a skilled
as
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and as
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a result
result
more development in Add a comma
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the
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apply
society
can happen.
In conclusion, although
economy
is Add an article
the economy
undeniable
aspect of every nation’s progress, various other factors directly affect the Add an article
an undeniable
economy
such
as public health
and practical educations
. These are essential for Fix the agreement mistake
education
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next-generation
next
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the next
generation
well-being.Change noun form
generation's
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