Some people says that adverting is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people thinks that advertising is so common that we no longer to pay attention to it. Discuss both sides of view and give your own opinion.

Some
people
believe that advertising is
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extremely
exteremly
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extremely
successful at persuading us to buy things. Others think that
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advertisements
advertisments
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advertisements
is
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so common and
does
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not steal our attention anymore.
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advertisements
advertisments
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advertisements
success and discuss
further
. Nowadays,
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advertisements
advertisments
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advertisements
are used everywhere to attract
people
toward buying things or pay for experiences
such
as travel. It is published in
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stations, streets, and inside buildings. Sometimes these
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advertisements
advertisement
advertisments
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advertisements
does
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not influence
people
because it is targeted
to
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everyone and not all can be
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thrilled
about
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content and details.
For example
, mobile applications now contain many
ads
that appear all the time, but these are general and it may attract
limited
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amount of viewers, an ad for a game that appears
in
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an old person’s phone will not bring enough attention.
However
, using advertising methods
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effectively
effictively
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effectively
can be successful by publishing it where the targeted consumers are located. In
this
way
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more
people
will be seeing the
ads
which it
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content
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contains
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may
interests
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them.
For example
, publishing
ads
about groceries
on
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the entrance of a supermarket will make those who see it excited
,
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and bring the targeted
costumers
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customers
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to enter the shop.
Moreover
, advertising through
internet
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the internet
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is more popular and efficient than ever, where you can find groups of interest and advertise using
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social media.
Furthermore
, Internet technology provided many techniques for companies and made marketing easier, where consumers can be reached through emails. In conclusion,
although
the wide
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distribution
distibution
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distribution
of
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advertisments
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sometimes does not give positive results in terms of influencing the
buyers
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appetite.
However
, targeted
ads
and planned marketing
is
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always showing successful results.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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