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It is impossible to help all people in the world, so governments should only focus on people in their own countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is controversial whether governments should only help their countries’ citizens or they should
also
 pay attention to
people
 from other countries. While some
people
 support
this
 point of view, I partly disagree with it. In
this
 essay, I will delve deep into both sides of the argument and give out my logical conclusion. On the one hand, the world’s leaders’ hesitation over the provision of international aid to undeveloped regions is legitimate because governments’ priority is to take care of their own inhabitants.
Additionally
, government budgets are finite.
Therefore
, there could be a strain on national budgets and less money to spend on social welfare
such
 as health care or the environment if governors agree to help foreign
people
.
On the other hand
, officials should help as many societies as they can regardless of the notion of helping all
people
 on the planet. Rich countries should assist struggling ones in their vital humanitarian sectors
such
 as health, nutrition and education. Nations,
for instance
, that include the domestic threat of famine or contagions due to war and terrorism
such
 as Yemen should be assisted by rich communities.
This
 humanitarian cause of assistance will have a considerable psychological impact on residents of prosperous places as well as the poor.
This
 appears as they deter any sense of alienation, fragmentation, or loss in favour of the enjoyment of charity and belonging to the world public.
Therefore
, helping others overseas not only helps the poor to live respectfully but
also
 promotes the idea of self-devotion and belonging to achieve a better world among the rich public. In conclusion,
although
 governors choosing to pay attention to their own inhabitants may be advantageous to some extent, I would argue that world leaders should lend their struggling neighbours a hand to offer help to
people
 in need.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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