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the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean Island between 2010 and 2017.

#tourists #caribbean #island
The line graph depicts the amounts of visitors to
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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island
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islands
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 which had separated
in
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into
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 three types of
figure
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figures
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 from 2010 to 2017. It is clear from the information provided that all of the
number
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numbers
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 have an upward fluctuation over the period, and the total
number
 of tourists have a most
significantly
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 increase. In 2010,
a
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the
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 summation of
visitor’s
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visitors
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number
have
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has
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 a
steadily
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steady
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rise
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rose
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 from just one
million
people
 to 3.5
million
people
, which was by far the greatest of all. While the figure of visitors who
staying
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stay
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 on
island
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the island
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 remained stable in
first
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the first
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 year, that reached
to
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apply
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a plateau at 1.5
million
people
 in 2013 for two years, and that
have
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has
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 a
slightly
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slight
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 drop
then
 climbed back to 1.5
million
 at the end of
period
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the period
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. Turning to the remaining item, the
number
 of tourists staying on
cruise
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a cruise
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ship
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ships
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 experienced a fluctuation for two years before
have
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having
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 a
significantly
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significant
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 increase from under 0.5
million
people
 to 2
million
people
, which was more than eight times greater than the beginning.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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