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Some cities create new housing for thier growing population by constructing a samller number of high-rise buildings.Other cities create more of Low-rise buildings whcih solution is better in your opinion.

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Population inclination has become a serious trouble for governments especially in big cities since it has become difficult to accommodate more
people
 under land scarcity.A few provinces prefer to construct horizontal
homes
.
However
, others opt for vertical ones.
This
 essay is an attempt of discussing both schools of thought along with an appropriate opinion. On the one hand, plenty of advantages are being provided by tall
buildings
.Since they are able to accommodate thousands of residents in the smaller areas because
this
 concept follows the construction of multiple storeys.
For instance
, because of the abundance of opportunities in big cities. Individuals are heading there, due to
this
 governments in cities like New Delhi, Gurugram and New York are constructing vertical
buildings
 to provide
homes
 to the
people
.
On the contrary
, during any mishappening like an earthquake and short circuit, these
buildings
 are not safe and a number of incidents have already been reported about the loss of precious lives.
On the other hand
, horizontal
buildings
also
 provide immense benefits.To start with ,
such
buildings
 are highly safe and can face a number of troubles
such
 as an earthquake and power failure, which are not easily combated by vertical
buildings
.
Moreover
, for old age
people
,horizontal
homes
 are the best option because it is inviable for them to use elevators.
Furthermore
, in
this
 modern age, a set of
people
 are Aerophobic and
thus
, horizontal
homes
 are good for them.
Conversely
, these dwellings are
also
 inviting some troubles.
Firstly
, these
homes
 are unable to accommodate a large number of
people
 and require more land space.
Secondly
, in the majority of cases, these
homes
 are expensive, To conclude, after a full discussion, I would like to say that both concepts are having their own merits and demerits.
However
, to provide housing to maximum
people
, apartment culture should be followed.
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