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Mobile phones have brought both benefits and drawbacks to phone users. Discuss both sides and state your opinion.

#phones #phone #users
With the advancements in technology, mobile phones and
laptops
 have become an indispensable part of our lives. Because they have made your life easy as compare to past. The use of mobile phones and
laptops
 has changed personal life completely. Because
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 longer need to write a letter to your family member
lives
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in
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abroad to enquire about his health, you can make a video call any time. You can do online shopping by using your mobile.
Furthermore
, now all assignments and exams are given through
laptops
. The use of
laptops
 has put a good impact on businesses as well in many ways as
,
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 you need not buy filing cupboards to store your documents , you can store them and keep them safe by setting passwords.
In addition
 , you can communicate with your employees and other companies through emails and texting.
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businesses are running online and have become the most successful businesses ,
for example
 , Amazon and eBay. Mobile phones made the world a global village because you can interact with other nations and come to know what is happening in the world and raise your voice.
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