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Band 4

Some people think that public transport should be free, especially in big cities. Do you think free public transportation will have more advantages or disadvantages?

Nowadays
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 public transport
became
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has become
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 one of the most popular transportation in the world.
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, some
people
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 think that
fare for
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public
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 transport
has
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fares have
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 to be accessible in urban areas.
This
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 essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages of free society transport and provide a logical conclusion. The two main advantages of a
fare-free
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 vehicle are
it
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that it
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is
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provides
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 financial aid for residents who
even is
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are
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 not able to pay for the fare
and
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, and
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 it
also
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 may be a reason for improving the
quality
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 of
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air
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the air
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.
Firstly
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,
fare-free
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will
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travel will
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 be like financial support for tourists, citizens, and students who do not have much cash to disburse for fares.
Secondly
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, the
quality
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 of
air
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 can improve by reducing the number of cars
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. For
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instance
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instance,
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 if
people
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 who drive cars stop driving, the
air
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 will be less polluted. The buses will be used more by the number of
people
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,
therefore
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, decreasing cars can
be influenced
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influence
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 on
quality
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 of
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air
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the air
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.
On the other hand
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,
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also
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 has some major disadvantages like
reduction
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a reduction
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of
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in
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 government
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money
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funding
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 and crowded
people
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 on the
bus
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.
the
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The
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 country will not be able to develop through tourism
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in
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; in
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 other words government can not receive
money
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 from tourists.
For example
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,
people
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 who come from a different country will spend a lot of
money
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 on transportation, hotels, and amusements.What’s more, the
bus
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 can
be
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get
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 completely
got
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apply
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crowded with a huge
amount
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number
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 of human beings
which
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, which
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 will even complex to enter
on
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apply
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the
bus
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.
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for
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For
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 instance, having a large number of
people
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 on the
bus
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 may be a great place for a virus.
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, reduction of government
money
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 and crowded can eliminate these advantages.
To conclude
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,
although
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fare-free
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 has certain positive effects like financial aid and improving the
quality
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 of
air
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, it has an extremely opposite influence on the country’s economy
and
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, and
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 buses will be extremely crowded with passengers. I believe that these benefits of
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 don’t outweigh its drawbacks

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strength
You give a clear view in the end that decides the issue. Add stronger, short details for each main idea to back your view.
weakness
Some ideas are not fully clear. Use simple, direct examples for each point to make your meaning clear.
weakness
Be constant in the word you use for transport (use 'fare-free' or 'free transport' the same way.
improvement
Use a strong topic sentence in each paragraph and a short wrap-up to help the flow.
structure
Clear final opinion on the issue.
coherence
Two body paragraphs with signposts like Firstly/On the other hand.
task response
The essay tackles both sides of the topic.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public transport
  • urban environment
  • economic benefits
  • local businesses
  • traffic congestion
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • social inclusion
  • marginalized groups
  • service quality
  • overcrowding
  • funding
  • transport services
  • financial burden
  • accessibility
  • essential services
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