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The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages.

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Nuclear
power
 has been used for electricity generation since the 50s, and it nowadays provides roughly 10% of world electricity from several reactors across the globe.
However
, its use remains highly controversial. Supporters of nuclear
power
 point out some advantages.
First
, it is a free carbon source.
Therefore
, it releases a lower proportion of greenhouse gases compared to other traditional sources of
energy
-
such
 as coal, gas, and oil.
Second
, it is a reliable source of
energy
. While some
energy
 sources are dependent on weather conditions, like solar and wind
power
, nuclear
energy
 does not have
such
 constraints.
For instance
, nuclear plants work 24 hours/day, seven days per week, and it does not matter if the windy doesn’t blow or the day is cloudy. While the arguments above are valid, I do not believe that they outweigh the disadvantages of the use of nuclear
power
.
Although
 nuclear
power
 plants release zero carbon emissions, it substantially impacts the environment, mainly through mining and water discharge. Mining of any kind negatively impacts the surrounding area. Mining of Uranium (used to produce nuclear
energy
) is particularly worst since it releases toxic gases into the environment.
Furthermore
, a considerable amount of water is necessary to cool the reactors and it is usually released back into the ocean and lakes.
This
 heated water jeopardizes most aquatic life.
Moreover
, the risk of accidents in nuclear
power
 is not trivial. Humanity has witnessed three major accidents in nuclear plants, in Ukraine, the United States and more recently, Japan. The
first
 one, in Chornobyl, not only did kill thousands of people but
also
 millions of people still struggle with long-term health problems- 36 years later after the accident. In a nutshell, the use of nuclear
power
 can be extremally dangerous to our planet and directly jeopardize our health. Currently, there are cleaner and safer sources of
energy
 that could be expanded,
such
 as hydro, solar, and windy
power
.
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