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Some people argue that working in a large company is important, others however give preference to work in a small company.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Certain people say that working in a large
company
 is crucial. Others,
however
, give preference to working in a small
company
. I believe working in a large
company
 is so crucial that it affects our CV and career. If you are working in a huge
company
, your salary would be so high that it promotes employees and gives us enormous job prospects and chances.
Also
, there are numerous job opportunities and promotions in large companies. We have to make an effort to stay in our jobs. We are so lucky to
work
 in
a
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huge cooperation. Everybody wants that but it is difficult to reach and achieve. It is well known that everybody wants to get it but just a few people apply for it. It requires high responsibility
However
, I prefer to stay in a small
company
 because it requires less responsibility. Working in it
less
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 stressful than working in a large corporation. and its wage is lower.
also
 have the opportunity to prove myself and do my best to hard
work
 and get on well with my colleagues to achieve my aim a small
company
 offers good friendship and less competitive place environment it
avoid
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 ambitious and depressive feelings it supplies a comfortable place and flexible working hours supplies a comfortable place and flexible working hours. its
opertional
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operational
 choice in conclusion. there are lots of
advantage
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 of both of
opoortunity
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opportunity
 but
i
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I
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 prefer to
work
 in a small
company
 because of less
work
 and less responsibility
furthermore
 it is less
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stressful
stresfull
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stressful
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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