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Despite huge improvements in healthcare, the overall standard of physical health in many developed countries is now falling. What could be the reason for this trend, and what can be done to reverse it?

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With the advance in technology, there is a significant development in the healthcare sector but
first
-world nations are encountering a fall in the overall standard of physical
health
. There are several factors contributing to the problem and in my essays, I would like to state 3 major reasons and how to reverse
it
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.
First
 of all, in developed nations, there is a lack of physical exercise nowadays. With updated trams and trains,
people
 rarely use their leisure
time
 to exercise for physical
health
. Developed countries
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therefore
 have
people
 at risk of heart problems and obesity. Government and
people
 should
work
hand
 in
hand
 to promote healthy lifestyles and
health
 cautious tips among the communities.
Secondly
,
work
-related
stress
 has been one of the factors impacting the decline in developed countries.
People
 tend to develop unhealthy eating habits and sleep disorders because of
work
stress
. In return, many
resulted
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inresulted
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 a sudden drop in overall standard.
Health
 organisations should start campaigns regarding how to handle
stress
 in a healthy way.
Thirdly
, the daily meal choice of most
people
 in developed countries chooses to be fast food or outside food. Since balancing
work
 and household is difficult, families start to find it difficult to have
time
 for home-cooked
meals
 which are not only nutritious but
also
 healthy.
Instead
, most working families tend to eat fast food frequently and the very habit leads to obesity and cancer. Organisations responsible for the workforce should look into allowing workers to go back on
time
 for preparing
meals
 for their families. In conclusion, the recent drop in the standard of physical
health
 in
first
-world nations could be because of lack of exercise,
stress
-induced problems and
time
 restraint for preparing healthy
meals
 at home. Several measures could take place to reverse it by promoting healthy lifestyles, starting campaigns to handle
stress
 better and allowing workers to go home early to prepare healthy
meals
. I would like to suggest that government agencies and
people
 should
work
hand
 in
hand
 to lead healthy lifestyles and be
health
-cautious every day.
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