most people decided to have children in their later age than in the past. why? do the advantages of this outweigh its disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples,e.g from your knowledge or experience
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people
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their
drawbacks.
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with the reason I would say, our modern life make
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makes
people
busy to pursue
their career. Change the verb form
pursuing
Instead
of, building their own families, moreover
the number of people
who are not ready to have kids increase each and every day
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instance
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an apartment
neighborhood
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they are not ready for marriage. And, the old Add a comma
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people
in my neighborhood
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tell them every Correct pronoun usage
apply
day
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Advantages
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The advantages
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on
first
it will decrease the divorce rate which leads that the Add a comma
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children
would not get enough care for separated parents. Second
, when people
worked all that time their finances could be good. So, they can Correct your spelling
manage
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manage
needs
of their Correct article usage
the needs
children
, because now everything is a
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apply
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were easier. As Replace the word
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result
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parent
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a parent
people
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with
children
due to healthy
issues. Replace the word
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decline
as the age increase and, leads to not having kids or it will be difficult. to illustrate, one Correct your spelling
declined
day
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forwaiting
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you will be like me I stand every Add a comma
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day
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the hospital
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hoping to increase my chance of pregnancy.
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