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The internet has become profoundly efficient and popular that people choose it as a platform to learn. Some believe that it would eventually replace the need for books. Do you agree or disagree?

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 today is widely used among mankind, unlike past, before the arrival of technology. In
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 era,
along with
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 other multiple features, it has provided a captivating mode of learning to its users as well. I disagree that the idea of getting e-learning would ultimately replace
books
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 . Analysis of the group of people, less privileged to have access to the technology and preferences in selecting the method to learn and teach would prove it.
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, an incredible source, online learning with all its notable benefits, is yet not affordable to many individuals. By in large, it has gained popularity among
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 generation but not everyone is up to enjoying the advanced technological developments.
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, poor families rely upon second-hand
books
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 to study, and can't afford the
internet
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 as full-fledged means of learning.
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, It is practically not possible for the net to replace the need for
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 physical entity, especially
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 there is a population who hardly gets to manage their educational expenses.
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,
books
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 are proven to be an essential need for these readers and they can't depend upon advanced learning
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 facing financial crises. 
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, the
internet
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 is a splendid medium of learning, yet can't simply overrule, resulting in the disappearance of
books
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.
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,
although
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 there is an availability of thousands of ebooks, video lectures, articles, and websites, it depends upon the individual person what he/she might prefer in order to gain
as well as
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, for those teachers and students who are more comfortable with hand notes, the
internet
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 can play as a useful tool in the study but will remain an inconvenient method of learning.
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, it can never be a replacement for
books
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 for
such
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 a population.  In conclusion, inaccessibility to the online study by a poor society on the one hand and preference to use
books
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 regardless of data available on-air,
on the other hand
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, are proven to be the limitations for the replacement of
books
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. They are not only the provider of facts or data and a source of learning but are the essence of knowledge.
Books
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 and the
internet
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 are equally crucial to fulfilling the demands of their users.
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