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Some believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time . This can benefit teenagers and the community as well . Do you agree or disagree.

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Some believe that
teenagers
 should be required to do unpaid
community
 jobs in their spare
time
.
This
 can benefit
teenagers
 and the
community
 as well.
First
 of all, I don't agree that
teenagers
 need
money
. They have to
work
 and earn
money
. They have got lots of responsibilities,
such
 as paying rent and bills. Adolescents have to buy food and lots of items because they have to
work
 for a wage. Sam has been working on shopping at the same
time
. He has to meet their needs. He has to go to the supermarket and buy some type of nutrition.
Secondly
,
time
 is the most crucial thing in the world. We have to be aware of how precious it is.We spend
time
 on our
work
, but we
also
 have to earn something from that, except experience.People make an effort and get a reward for every single effort.
Furthermore
,
money
 is the reward
of
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for
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 our effort.
i
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I
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 wanted to buy something after
work
 because
i
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I
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 thought
i
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I
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 deserved it.
Thirdly
, they have to save up
money
 and be ready for any circumstance.
Perhapas
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Perhaps
, inflation is worsening and the economy is suffering
as a result
.
Teenagers
 want to buy something, but they can't if they don't earn
money
 from their
community
 job. survive without
money
.any investment cant
be
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 made without
money
.
iy
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I
 may be some
teenagers
thing
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think
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 to invest in
crypto currency
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cryptocurrency
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, but if they
havent
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haven't
have
 enough
money
 to invest, it might be for their bright future.
consequently
 , we can
work
 in a
community
 job it is
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a
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beneficial
experience
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to experience
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 for our career. if we want to go forward, we have to earn
money
 from it.
also
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,
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they, have to save
money
 for
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a
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bright future
therefore
 they
cant
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can't
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work
 without pay in a
community
 job
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