It’s often believed that money doesn’t bring you happiness. Please explain your opinion based on your knowledge and experience.
It is commonly believed that wealth cannot buy
happiness
. Some people
agree with this
and some people
think that money
can bring happiness
by affording all the necessities and desires. However
, I agree with the former opinion. This
essay will analyse the points of how money
cannot bring happiness
in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
, there are a lot of people
who are wealthy and can afford all the luxurious facilities even then
they are not happy in their lives due to their busy schedules. This
is because happiness
is something which we cannot buy from anywhere at any cost. For ,example there are many celebrities and rich business owners who are in depression because of their loneliness and they cannot do anything regarding this
with the money
they have.
Secondly
, some people
do not have time
for their loved ones due to their busy schedules and money
-driven attitudes. They cannot spend their leisure time
effectively and they do not have time
for relaxation as well as to lighten their moods. The consequences of such
a living style left the people
deprived of being happy. Due to a recent survey, people
who work more than 12 hours a day and chase money
are more prone to depression as they do not get enough time
to re-energise their minds and bodies.
To conclude, even though money
can let people
afford any luxurious commodity in the world, it cannot bring them happiness
as when they chase money
they are left with more depression and loneliness due to their busy schedules.Submitted by guneetgrewal17 on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite