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Some people feel that life was better in the past when we had less modern technology because things were simpler and less complicated. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

It cannot be ignored that
technology
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 developed drastically in the past decades
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 has tremendously impacted our lives today. There are some
people
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 who claim that without
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,
life
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 is much better and simpler.
This
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 without modern
technology
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 is not as simple as claimed. In the past,
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 was plain and far less complicated
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 many preferred . Understanding
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 and being able to live with it requires patience, which many
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 see as
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hassles
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.
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, as there was no food delivery service in the past,
people
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 would go to restaurants and stalls to order
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exactly what
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 they wanted without having to go through errors in communication. Behaviour as
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 was straightforward and brought simplicity to
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. In the present, everything we do in
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 is intertwined with the advancement of
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 paves
way
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 for convenience. Humans can now get chores or work done at the tip of their fingers.
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, inventions like vacuum robots that can be controlled through mobile phones allow humans to allocate their time to other tasks
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 getting the chore done. For these reasons,
people
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 continue to use
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 in every aspect of
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 it can do more good than harm. In conclusion, there are
people
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 who see that
life
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 without modern
technology
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 is simpler and less complex, and would prefer
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 lifestyle. In my opinion, I do not agree with
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 as I believe that
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 belief is
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 how
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 are ill-informed about it or not taught how to use it properly.

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structure
Link ideas with clear topic sentences. Start each paragraph with a line that shows your view.
content
Give one or two strong examples and explain how they prove your point.
grammar
Check grammar and use short, plain sentences.
conclusion
Keep the end to rest your view. Do not add new ideas in the conclusion.
mechanics
Use simple punctuation and correct spacing.
tone
There is a clear view on the issue.
organization
There is a simple plan: intro, body, and conclusion.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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