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Children find bit difficult to concentrate on orpay attention to school.what are the reasons? How can we solve this problem?

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Introduction
It is often thought that it is hard for scholars to focus
in
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 their studies and lack interest in
school
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This
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 essay will look at the core reasons and propose
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solution
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Body paragraph 1
To begin
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 with, poverty is one of the major reasons why there is reduction
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in youngsters
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youngsters
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youngsters'
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 interest in
education
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. In order words, due to poverty, children engaged in all manner of things like doing
manual
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the manual
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job
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, hawking before and in order to help their struggling parents to make ends meet. Having to Carter for the family, while teaching is going on the child is thinking of how to make money for the day. Take
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for
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 instance, a popular celebrity
met
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 a youngster as a
brick layer
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bricklayer
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 carrying blocks and sand at a building construction site still in his
school
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 uniform, when asked the pupil replied that he is the
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breadwinner
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bread winner
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breadwinner
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 in his family.
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, teachers are
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a culprit
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culprit
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 in
this
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 situation.
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 means that some tutors verbally and physically abuse students became of their inability to comprehend what was taught thereby increasing their fear
to
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of
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education
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Body paragraph 2
One of the
way
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 to
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tackle
tackel
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tackle
this
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 menace is
involvement
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the involvement
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 of government agencies. What
this
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 implies is that with
provision
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the provision
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 of job opportunities and
payment
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the payment
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 of allowance to parents who do not have any source of income will go
along
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a long
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 way for them to take care of their children without forcing these youngsters into child labour and they in turn will focus on their
education
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, the governor of Anambra
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, Nigeria is paying monthly allowance to the impoverished and
this
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 act has allowed
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the pupil
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pupil
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pupils
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 to concentrate
in
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on
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 their studies. Another point is that before an educator is employed I'm any
school
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, he ought to be assessed by proprietors to ensure that he
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 the good qualities of a teacher
such
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 as being patient, considerate, and observant, as with these characteristics it will be difficult for teachers to hurt a child.
Conclusion
I'm conclusion, children are losing interest and paying less attention to
education
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 due to reasons
such
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 as poverty, and abusive tutors.
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 is a serious problem unless taken into account by
government
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the government
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 and
school
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 proprietors.

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