Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Nowadays an increasing number of parents are letting
children
make their own
decisions
on different life issues. While some argue that letting youngsters make choIces by themselves concerning day-to-day matters will lead to a community made up of people who only think of themselves. Others believe that it is crucial to empower
children
to make resolutions on issues that have an effect on them. In my opinion, I agree with the former view. On one hand, letting
children
make
decisions
on daily matters
such
as meals,
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and entertainment will make them less considerate of others.
This
is because these young ones do not have the ability to discern right from wrong so they are just unable to put other
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needs before their own. As they grow, these habits are cemented if parents do not step in to guide them.
For example
, my sister's older child would always want to watch spider man even if his younger sister would be crying for something different so he grew up to be a selfish young man.
On the other hand
, it is important to let these young people make
decisions
on things that concern them because it will teach them to be more responsible. When a child makes a choice, and it turns out to be a bad choice that leads to terrible consequences they will learn to make better
decisions
in the future.
For instance
, if a child chooses to eat more ice cream than they should and ends up with
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, they will learn that ice cream should be eaten in moderation. To conclude, while letting
children
make their own choices will lead to a society of people who are selfish others still contend that when it comes to matters that concern them,
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should be left to make those
decisions
on their own.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Autonomy
  • Consequence-awareness
  • Self-centered
  • Informal decision-making education
  • Child development
  • Age-appropriate choices
  • Cognitive growth
  • Fostering independence
  • Parental guidance
  • Societal norms
  • Interpersonal consideration
  • Balance of freedom
  • Individualism versus collectivism
  • Experience-based learning
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