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Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema other says to be fully enjoyed films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both these views and give your own opinión

#people #films #phones #tablets #cinema #opinión
Nowadays, due to the availability of technology at our
fingertips
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people
 often choose to watch
movies
 on their
device
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devices
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 like mobile or
tablet
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tablets
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. But some
people
are
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stick to
watch
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watching
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movies
 in
cinema
halls
 to experience the huge screen and
watching
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watch
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 their favourite
character
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characters
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 and actors. I would prefer to watch
movies
 on my
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table
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tables
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tablet
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 or cell phone rather than going to
cinema
halls
.
Firstly
, I would discuss
about
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apply
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the
people
metanlity
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mentality
 who choose to watch
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a movie
the movie
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movie
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movies
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 on their device. Some
people
 prefer to stay at home lying on their bed eating their favourite snacks and watching the
movie
 their enjoyment
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 on their bed. Some
people
 think
pratically
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practically
 that if I will go to
cinema
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the cinema
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 the cost of
ticket
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the ticket
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, transport cost , snacks cost which will sum up the amount
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, on the other hand,
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on the other hand
 take out time to go to see the
movie
. So they take
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Netflix
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netflix
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a netflix
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 subscription and watch all the
movies
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throughout
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through out
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throughout
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 the month without any restrictions.
Thus
this
 trend is booming
now a days
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nowadays
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 in Youngsters because they have to
expence
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expense
 wisely as per their pocket money.
Secondly
, Some viewers are so
desparate
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desperate
 to see the
movie
 on the day of reléase
first day
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first
 show, because they want to create status in the society. Others are so
facinating
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fascinating
 to watch
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a movie
the movie
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movie
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movies
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 in
cinema
hall
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halls
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because
becuase
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because
 the real enjoyment of watching action
movies
 with 3d
effect
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effects
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 only can be seen in theatres.
This
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people
 are not in the group of
people
 who watch
movies
 daily on their devices. They are the real fan of the
cinema
halls
 and the experience they get in that they
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fulfil
fullfill
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fulfil
 their wants.
Thus
watch
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watching
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movies
 in
cinema
halls
 will not be outdated but will go some more decades. To culminate, the
people
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opinión
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opinions
 varies significantly, but it is more joyful and
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interesting
intersting
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interesting
 watching
movie
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a movie
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 on
the
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a
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 cell phone or
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table
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tables
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tablet
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.
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