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there are many different types of music in the world today. why do we need music? is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

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There are various types of
music
 in today's world, listening to traditional
music
,
in contrast
 to international one yields community-wide benefits.
Firstly
, traditional
music
 strengthens solidarity among societies. Every nation has several values
such
 as national cuisine, clothing
or
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and
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music
 which set it apart from others. Because some of the traditional
music
 become an icon or a symbol of a whole nation. It represents the notion of the culture of a specific society. Having listened from childhood whenever they hear the typical traditional
music
 somewhere they remember their national identity and no matter in which country they are
people
 from the same country can unite,
in other words
 solely traditional
music
 can encourage unanimity among
people
.
Secondly
, we need traditional
music
 to educate the
people
. Cultural
music
 expresses the history of a country, informing the heroic deeds of ancestors or the hardships that a nation underwent. By listening to traditional
music
people
, especially
young
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the young
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 generation of a society can glean invaluable history-related information.
This
, in turn, encourages
people
 to recognize who their predecessors were ,
what
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and what
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 they did, and teach them to be proud of being
the
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 descendent of them.
For example
, in Turkey in almost every national media
people
 hear their traditional
music
everyday
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 and that made them more patriotic. In conclusion,
although
 there are many sorts of
music
,
instead
 of
foreign
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a foreign
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one
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ones
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, listening to traditional
music
 plays an important role in not only uniting
and
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apply
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but
also
 educating
of
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a society.
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