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Some people believe that technology has made man more social. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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There is no doubt that in
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 contemporary era , usage of social websites has dramatically increased. The question is, do technological developments make
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 more social? I personally believe that social sites and recent
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 have a big role in the current status of
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, machinery
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 have helped to create an easy way to communicate.  The main reason given to support
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 claim is that
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such
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 as phones, iPods and laptops are used globally by
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 to contact a number of individuals through calls or text messages. Which has resulted in
men
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 being more socialized.
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, my brother's friends who are in Poland uses recent development to keep in touch with my brother .
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, much communication is done by new technology
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 which help to increase the social level of
men
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 On the same hand, social media websites have proven to extend the social state of
males
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.
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 is because, when they are sharing posts and stories of their interest and daily life, individuals with the same involvement will start following their accounts , open conversations with them and possibly creating online friendships .
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, when individuals are interested in someone, they search for their social accounts to get an idea of them and to get to know them better.
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, making
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 more socialized. To conclude technology material and social sites have a great impact on the status of
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.
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, I completely agree that technology has an enormous effect on the popularity of certain
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social interaction
  • connect
  • communicate
  • video conferencing
  • stay in touch
  • online communities
  • forums
  • like-minded individuals
  • global communication
  • collaboration
  • access to information
  • knowledge
  • bridge the gap
  • social isolation
  • detachment
  • face-to-face communication
  • genuine human connection
  • maintain
  • real-life interactions
  • balance
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