Some people believe that allowing children to male their own choices on everyday matters(such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There are different opinions about whether
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people. Personally, I think that we should let them decide but
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should not be on the edge. ​On the one hand, children who are raised by very strict
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turn out to be introverts in
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society. As a kid, they had to follow every single instruction of their
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regardless of what they wanted to do.
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technology. But their
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’ hope is for them to become doctors or engineers. They cannot try what they are really interested in and they become people who do not have ambition. So, it is very important to let children decide or think
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they were young. ​
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usually become a person who does not have empathy
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happens because they always had what they wanted from their guardian and did not have to think
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essential to control some of their emotions when they were young. ​
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, I am raised by my
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and taught to think about every probability and
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before I do something. Today, I became someone who knows what I really want and at the same time
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empathy for others that
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Autonomy
  • Consequence-awareness
  • Self-centered
  • Informal decision-making education
  • Child development
  • Age-appropriate choices
  • Cognitive growth
  • Fostering independence
  • Parental guidance
  • Societal norms
  • Interpersonal consideration
  • Balance of freedom
  • Individualism versus collectivism
  • Experience-based learning
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