To meet the growing need for food to support an increasing population, a country should make use of edible insects as a food source. However, some people believe that insects are not only unhealthy but harvesting them will also negatively affect nature. What are the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects?

Food
shortage has become a major
problem
in many countries, especially in
the
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developing and underdeveloping countries. To tackle
such
problem
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,
this
is where the
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government
governemnt
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government
in each country needs to come up with an alternative
solution
. Shifting attention from agricultural
food
products and processed
food
to the diet of
insects
can be a
solution
to
this
problem
.
However
, before one can decide to digest
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insects
,
it
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must
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made
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sure that no harm will cause. In
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several
serveral
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several
countries, eating
insects
is nothing new to the people.
For example
, in Thailand, many have lived on by eating
insects
as snacks as it has proteins,
such
as worms and
catepillars
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caterpillars
, needed for the body. It has
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become
becme
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become
a common custom that many people in each region of Thailand adopt to do so. It even attracts tourists to have a shot
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tasting the deliciousness of the
insects
, when cooked right. As it is easy to harvest and cook,
this
is indeed a cost
effcient
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efficient
solution
. If
food
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industry
decide
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to focus on coming
with
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amazing dishes that have
insects
as their ingredients, it would
also
provide jobs for many in
th
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the
rural area.
This
could generate better GDP for the country and open up
new
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sector
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of industry. Even though it may
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many benefits for the economy and society, it does come with a lot of setbacks regarding the environment. Once all these
insects
and their eggs are consumed as
food
,
this
could harm the agricultural sectors and affect humans in the long run. If all these
insects
are over-harvested like fish, soon they would become extinct. It could lead to
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fall in agriculture, as there are no
insects
to carry the
pollents
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pollen
pollens
polls
to make
a fruitful harvests
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or kill pests that would harm plants.
Moreover
, if
that is
the case, humans would lose
its
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major
food
resources and that could lead to upheavals and disruption in the society where people fight for
food
.
This
would only exacerbate the
problem
. The better
solution
for
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to support the need for
food
to support an increasing population and not harm the environment, policy and ground rules need to be established.
This
is to save the population of the
insects
from going extinct and preserve human's main
food
source which comes from
agricultural
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sector. Harvesting seasons of
insects
need to be clear, their eggs must be eliminated from harvesting, and provide
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time for the
insects
to regenerate and rebuild
its
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population. Even though humans are at the top of the
food
pyramid,
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we need to meet in the middle so every species could survive
this
crisis.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • Finally
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