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To meet the growing need for food to support an increasing population, a country should make use of edible insects as a food source. However, some people believe that insects are not only unhealthy but harvesting them will also negatively affect nature. What are the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects?

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Food
 shortage has become a major
problem
 in many countries, especially in
the
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developing and underdeveloping countries. To tackle
such
problem
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,
this
 is where the
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government
governemnt
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government
 in each country needs to come up with an alternative
solution
. Shifting attention from agricultural
food
 products and processed
food
 to the diet of
insects
 can be a
solution
 to
this
problem
.
However
, before one can decide to digest
on
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insects
,
it
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must
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just
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made
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 sure that no harm will cause. In
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several
serveral
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several
 countries, eating
insects
 is nothing new to the people.
For example
, in Thailand, many have lived on by eating
insects
 as snacks as it has proteins,
such
 as worms and
catepillars
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caterpillars
, needed for the body. It has
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become
becme
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become
 a common custom that many people in each region of Thailand adopt to do so. It even attracts tourists to have a shot
in
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 tasting the deliciousness of the
insects
, when cooked right. As it is easy to harvest and cook,
this
 is indeed a cost
effcient
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efficient
solution
. If
food
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 industry
decide
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 to focus on coming
with
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 amazing dishes that have
insects
 as their ingredients, it would
also
 provide jobs for many in
th
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the
 rural area.
This
 could generate better GDP for the country and open up
new
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sector
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 of industry. Even though it may
has
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 many benefits for the economy and society, it does come with a lot of setbacks regarding the environment. Once all these
insects
 and their eggs are consumed as
food
,
this
 could harm the agricultural sectors and affect humans in the long run. If all these
insects
 are over-harvested like fish, soon they would become extinct. It could lead to
the
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 fall in agriculture, as there are no
insects
 to carry the
pollents
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pollen
pollens
polls
 to make
a fruitful harvests
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 or kill pests that would harm plants.
Moreover
, if
that is
 the case, humans would lose
its
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 major
food
 resources and that could lead to upheavals and disruption in the society where people fight for
food
.
This
 would only exacerbate the
problem
. The better
solution
for
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to support the need for
food
 to support an increasing population and not harm the environment, policy and ground rules need to be established.
This
 is to save the population of the
insects
 from going extinct and preserve human's main
food
 source which comes from
agricultural
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 sector. Harvesting seasons of
insects
 need to be clear, their eggs must be eliminated from harvesting, and provide
specific
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 time for the
insects
 to regenerate and rebuild
its
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 population. Even though humans are at the top of the
food
 pyramid,
but
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we need to meet in the middle so every species could survive
this
 crisis.
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