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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or dis agree.

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There has been an agitation that persons of all gender should be given equal numbers of admission into
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an institution
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institution
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 of higher learning
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 of the chosen course of study. I support
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expatiating
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. One of the reasons why I agree with
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 line of thought is that, I believe that the human quest for knowledge is
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sacrosanct
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 development of every individual without
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 to their sex and definitely without prejudice to the
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various
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subjects
 offered at the universities
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 to give priority to any gender of student in the admission processes of institutions of higher learning particularly regarding the subjects offered and the consequent career paths.
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, it is a given fact that there is little or no difference in the capacities of a man or woman's brain. Another reason why I agree with the proponents of
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 motion is that citadels of learning should be made
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accessible
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accessible
 to all and sundry provided they have the required academic qualification to be admitted without cherry-picking of course work and curriculum.
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, male students should not be steered towards science and
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technology related
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 courses while study options
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 as sociology and education are offered to their female counterparts.
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,
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eradicating
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 segregation will help in tackling the
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 divides and stereotypes against certain subjects and learning interests. To sum up, equal amounts of entry
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opportunity
 should be given to both male and female applicants to the university without prejudice as to their subject or course preference.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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