The two maps compare the present form of the Southside shopping mall to its development plan.

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, the biggest change that can be observed is the size of the shopping mall. To facilitate the expansion of the building, the golf course and the park which are located on the east side of the building

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will be removed. The other major change is the car park. It will be expanded towards the area where

fitness

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the fitness

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centre is currently located. The increasing size of the shopping mall is to allow more spaces for shopping and beauty areas, which will be composed of a beauty salon, two shoe

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, a cosmetic store, a gift shop and several fashion

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. The addition of those new

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the expense of the play area, the noodle shop and the cinemas.

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several

stores

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will be replaced, the supermarket and the toilet will stay the same. The department store will

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remain

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the current side of the building, but it will be larger in size and it will have its own entrance. There will,

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, be nowhere to eat as the plan shows that the café will

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be converted

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an information centre.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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3 paragraphs

200 words

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Some pople think that students should learn main subjects only. To what extent do you agree?

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Some people believe that a crime is a result of social problems and poverty, others think that crime is a result of bad person's nature. Discuss both views and give your opinion