Many students find it difficult to pay attention at school. What are the reasons for this? What could be done to solve this problem?

The world has known the phrase "
education
is key to success" for generations.
This
itself elaborates that how important
education
is for the prosperity of
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mankind.
However
, scientists have discovered that "distracting attention" is one of the most dominant factors affecting the
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focus
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on their
education
at the school. There are plenty of reasons why
students
lose their focus on
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at school. The very
first
reason I wish to emphasize is the "conventional learning methods" followed by the academy. The millennials are fond of cope-up with technology and they are lacking interest in conventional learning techniques followed by most
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institute
such
as "teacher-oriented" learning. The
second
one is "lacking subject-based interesting learning activities" where recruitment
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to provide sufficient time
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self-learning rather than
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them.
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but not least is "creating artificial rivalry among
students
by the institution to thrive for accomplishment in examination" which will keep on building psychological pressure in
students
' minds and as a
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they lose their focus on what they are learning. I will now discuss the solutions
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the aforementioned problems.
Instead
of teacher-based learning, the
schools
can allocate a few sessions to "peer-to-peer learning incorporating new technologies" where
students
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some relevant topics can educate their friends.
Further
, the
schools
can encourage interesting activities in the curriculum like debates on
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topics, social experiments etc. where every student in the class can actively participate.
Further
, the
schools
have to take steps to eliminate unnecessary pressure put on
students
to succeed in their exams by giving proper emotional guidance. In my point of view, these simple steps would help
students
to concentrate on their
education
at
schools
where ultimately they will be able to taste the success in their lives.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • concentration
  • attention span
  • distractions
  • technology
  • boredom
  • tiredness
  • engagement
  • learning disabilities
  • teaching techniques
  • classroom size
  • family issues
  • health problems
  • motivational strategies
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