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It is no longer necessary to use animals for food, clothing or medical research. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#animals #food #research
For centuries humans used
animals
 for personal
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benefit
benefits
benifit
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benefit
 including food, science research and
to
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manifacture
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manufacture
 materials. While some people support these practices, many
state
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 that there
no
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is no
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 longer a necessity to exploit
animals
 for personal
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benefit
benifit
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benefit
. There are many reasons why people decide to use products of
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wildlife
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wild
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wildlife
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life
.
Firstly
,
meat
 is crucial for human survival.
Meat
 is not only a source of energy, it is
also
 packed with essential nutrients and vitamins for
healthy
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a healthy
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 functioning human organism.
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Additionally
Additional
Additionaly
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Additionally
,
great
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a great
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 amount of cultures around the world
base
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bases
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 their
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traditional
tradional
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traditional
 food on different parts of
meat
 and
organs
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the organs
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 of an animal. Removing
such
vital
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a vital
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 part of traditions will result in partial loss of culture and history.
Humanity
also
 greatly relies on
animals
 to use in health research to test drug
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safety
safty
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safety
 or simply study organs and their function. Exploiting non-human
life
 for research allows scientists to better understand
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the disease
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disease
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diseases
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 and find
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a cure
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cure
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cures
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 for them.
Use
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The use
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 of
animals
 in different aspects of
life
 is crucial for
humanity
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humanity's
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 survival.
Although
 there are many reasons why
animals
 and animal products are important for humans, I
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believe
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belive
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believe
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 that
animals
 should not be used for human
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benefit
benifit
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benefit
. Animal
researches
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researchers
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 many times proved that
animal
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animals
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 can experience pain and some are
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aware
awear
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aware
 of themselves and can
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experience
experence
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experience
 simple emotions. Humans should take
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responsibility
responsability
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responsibility
 and care for creatures who live on the
plant
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planet
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 to assist them in development and prosperity.
Furthermore
, current technology and
reaserch
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research
 of
moderen
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modern
 days
allows
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 society to
recive
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receive
simialr
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similar
benifits
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benefits
 without any
sacrefice
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sacrifice
 of
life
. As
vegan
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a vegan
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 and
vegitarian
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vegetarian
 lifestyle
becomes
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become
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 more
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popular
pupular
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popular
, there are numerous
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plant-based
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plant-base
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plant-based
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meat
 replacement
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options
oprions
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options
 from mushrooms to artificially created
meat
 substitute.
Additionally
, animal clothing materials can be replaced by plant
fibers
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fibres
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 like cotton and linen. In conclusion, nowadays, there are many replacements for
animals
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animal
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 products and
humanity
does
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should no longer rely on
animals
.
Although
 some may disagree with
this
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statement
statemnt
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statement
, I state that
humanity
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humans
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 should no longer utilize
animals
 for personal gains.
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