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The key solution for the environmental issues is for the current generation to live a less comfortable life to benefit future generations. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

#generation #life #benefit #future #generations
It is believed by many that the best measure to resolve the problems of the environment is to be sacrificed
convenient
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 lifestyle
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current
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the current
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 generation for preserving resources for upcoming generations.
Although
 technology and state can be helpful for future
generation
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generations
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 yet I argue that
human
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humans
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 should take small steps for
upcoming
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the upcoming
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time
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times
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.
To begin
 with, there are myriad reasons to believe that
human
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 should not need to live a discomfort-able life for the sake of
benefits
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the benefits
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 of coming times. Indeed,
state
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 has already taken many prominent steps for resolving environmental issues. If we adhere to those regulations carefully, we are
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not
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 need to change our living style.
For instance
,
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 of plastic bags is prohibited by
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the government
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government
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governments
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 all around the world because of its hazardous effects. So, one should ensure the
use
 of paper bags
instead
 of plastic ones. What is more, technology is
also
 helpful for making the environment better for
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the future
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.
Thus
,
current
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the current
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 human race
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no
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 need to be worried about upcoming times. Despite the above-mentioned points, many others believe that human may change their
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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 to improve the conditions of
surroundings
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their surroundings
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.
Firstly
, humans can
use
alternate
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 sources of energy
such
 as wind and solar energy, so that unsustainable sources like coal and fuel can be preserved for future
generation
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generations
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otherwise
 they would be deprived of these precious experiences.
Secondly
, pollution is another problem which is escalating only because of human activities
such
 as more
use
 of private vehicles rather than using public transport. Even though plantation of trees can be a potential solution for environmental problems without staking the comfort. In conclusion, technology is the greatest boon for mankind and acts as a solution to grave issues, I,
nevertheless
, believe that it is our duty to make our environment and planet more sustainable by taking
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 steps that are mentioned above.
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