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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Many argue that doctors and engineers ought to
work
 for the country from
where
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which
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 they acquire their degree, while others believe that
professionals
 need to
work
 wherever they like to
do
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. In my opinion, I believe that they should
work
 according to their wish. On the one hand, there are several reasons why many people support the idea that doctors and engineers should
work
 in the place of their graduation.
Firstly
,
professionals
 can apply their knowledge more precisely in the country from where they gain their expertise because they learn from the same environment.
For example
, when a biologist learns about a specific species which only found in that specific place, he can apply his skills more accurately.
Secondly
, there are
also
 some moral obligations to
work
 in their learning environment. By retaining the best
experts
, an educational institute can be benefited from them in terms of educating others.
On the other hand
, it is believed by many that the
experts
 should
work
 at their own wish, and I agree. When
professionals
 are allowed to
work
 at their own pace, they can achieve some extraordinary things that could not be possible
otherwise
.
For instance
, if
professionals
 like doctors are free from pressure, which is created by others, they can invent a cure for a lethal disease.
As a result
, societies would be benefitted.
Furthermore
, after completing graduation
experts
 can come back to their own countries and apply their skills
on
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 their motherlands.
Thus
, the infrastructures and services will be developed in their countries. To sum up, while there are arguments among people about the workplace of the
professionals
, I think
experts
 should be allowed to
work
 on their own wish.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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