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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case ? Do you think this a positive or negative situation ?

#countries #home #people #be #case #situation
Buying a house is considered a must to feel safe
moreover
this
 will reduce your expense; as you will save renting fees. Many
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 consider having a home a waste of money
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 to a lack of flexibility,
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example
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 if you want to move to another country, it will require too many arrangements, On contrary if it was just a rent, it would be much easier for moving.
community
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a community
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 who are with the idea of owning a place to live in permanently, are somehow have their reasons like; feeling safe, reducing their payment, and they consider it a kind of long-term investment,
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, if they buy a house for 10000 dollars, they will sell it for 20000 in the future, so that they can gain a lot of money. There is no doubt that
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 people have the right to have their own houses in order to feel safe and wealthy too, but they still lack flexibility. People, who are against having their own house, are
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 with the idea of renting, so that they
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 example, can move anywhere at the moment they get better chances for working or studying in another country, there are
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 of advantages that out weight the disadvantages, so I am
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 with the renting rather than owing, there are many reasons but the most significant two reasons are; owing coasts much money and less flexibility. To conclude, we all have different situations in our life,
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 a
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 our thinking ways vary according to our
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 and needs, so we have to take the right decision.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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