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Today's society is based on laws and rules. It can't function well if individuals are free to do whatever they want. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Regulations are made to form modern
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. While some think that the freedom of individuals is fundamental and unharmful to
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, I disagree with
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 idea and believe that
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 phenomenon will do more harm to how
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 functions. When no rules or laws are made by the government, individuals’ behaviours are out of control, and people can do whatever they want.
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 could lead to others might suffer from these harmful actions, and worse, the whole
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. Overbuying stocks for personal gains,
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, could potentially lead to the collapse of the stock market prices ultimately downgrading the nation’s economy.
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 result,
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, could mean that the government may not have enough funds to invest in other sectors. Clearly,
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 cannot function well if people can freely behave without any consequences.
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 to that, with no regulations, there would be no instructions for future generations. The children growing up without any guidance will result in a chaotic
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 associated with an increase in juvenile delinquency. They may drop out of school at a very young age or commit petty crimes for money.
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, the future generations, who grow up with a repressed upbringing, will potentially lose their way and cannot contribute their values to the nation.
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, in the worst scenario, could totally collapse. In conclusion, it is vital for the government to make regulations to control individual actions. Without
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, the whole
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 cannot properly function and may step back from the present.
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