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Some people consider price as the most important thing to think about when buying products (such as cellphones) or services (medical treatments) do you agree or disagree?

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Cost
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 of purchasing goods or
service
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services
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 is often perceived by many people as the main
criteria
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criterion
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 for acquiring those. In my opinion, I believe that buying an expensive product (mobile) or utility (
life saving
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do
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 justify
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 purpose to be the pricey item for various reasons.
Firstly
, the gross value of the item largely depends on the attributes it carries
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because
becuase
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because
 that concurs
to
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 its quality, incorporated functions and
the
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user experience.
In other words
, the observation
in
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is
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 that the graded goods do ask for higher exchange value and vice versa.
This
 means,
the
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that the
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 lower categorised products in terms of
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quality often
arrives
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arrive
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 at
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 less sale
price
.
Hence
, to create a calibrated solution one needs to load it with good features.
For example
, Apple phones are higher in
purchase
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the purchase
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price
 for
its
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their
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 indispensable security and the illustrious "customer journey feel".
Secondly
, the selling
price
 of the featured utility is
also
 derived from its ability to perform under extremely critical do-or-die
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kinds
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 of situations. Particularly,
this
 is applicable to the
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life-saving
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 devices available in the market. Eventually, the hospitals, those assists in safeguarding
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lives,
also
 prefer to stock the best machines those offer services during
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critical times. And, to do so those operating machines
requires
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require
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 warranties to keep them functioning better and provide
the
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accurate
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performance
performace
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performance
.
For instance
, AEDs (Automated External Defibrillators) used in recouping the patient from
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potential
potiential
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potential
 death
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 priced high when bought from the Authorised dealer than compared to the grey market as the grey market does not provide the maintenance. To conclude, the
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benefits
benfits
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benefits
, longevity and
the
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durability determines the cost
price
 of the purchased goods and service to be incremented and I
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definitely
definately
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definitely
 agree with it.
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