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What are the advantages and disadvantages of leaving your country to live or study abroad?

#country #study
Nowadays it is widely spread
in
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 a young generation community to leave their country for some time
studying
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to study
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,
working
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 or
living
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 abroad. Clearly, the cause of it is that young people are excited about getting to know different cultures,
get
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 some new
experience
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experiences
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 and just
create
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 some memories. In
this
essay
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 I will provide
advantages
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the advantages
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 and disadvantages
about
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of
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 moving abroad for studying and living abroad. A major advantage of living abroad is
possibility
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the possibility
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 to get knowledge from other nations and bring it to their own country. The main example is Russian Emperor Peter the Great, after living in
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 he built St. Petersburg from the scratches in 1703.
By
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 the influence of living in
Europe
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,Europe
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 he wanted to connect Russia with it and
that is
 why
second
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 city’s name is Window to
the
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Europe. Another argument in support of living abroad is
practicing
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language
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the language
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. Statistics demonstrate that the best way to improve language skills is
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interaction
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 with native speakers.
That is
 why living abroad is the best way to improve language level.
On the other hand
, countries are massively losing their workforce. Companies can be closed or downsized, all of
it
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 leads to
country’s
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a country’s
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economy
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 crisis. Another drawback is that foreigners take
work place
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workplace
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 or study
place
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the place
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 of the citizens and it makes people
doing
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protests
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protest
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. As an example, in Germany people did not support the idea of giving 50
percent
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 of workplaces to
the
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foreigners, as it is
also
 hard for citizens to find a job. All in all, living abroad benefits outweigh
drawbacks
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.
Nevertheless
, moving to another country is a tough process and facing difficulties is a common problem.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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