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As increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problem does this cause? What can be done to deal with this solution?

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It is irrefutable that the vast majority of professionals are going
developed
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 nations
in
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present
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 time for various purposes. I am of opinion that
such
 type of practice can be detrimental in the long run for
the
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underprivileged
countries
.
This
 essay will articulate causes along with
its
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solutions to tackle
this
 problem. To commence with the causes that one of the reasons is that people want to
upgraded
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 their
life
standard
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standards
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 and enjoy better opportunities in both
professionals
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professional
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 as well as in personal
life
.
In other words
, luxurious lives, well infrastructure system,
huge
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and huge
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 amenities in wealthy
countries
 make them
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 for coming in these nations.
Therefore
, professional workers not only prefer to job but
also
 settle down forever
on
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 developed nations which leads to brain -
drain
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the drain
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 phenomenon. Apart from
this
, highly educated people like doctors, engineers and teachers tend to provide
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world-class
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world class
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 education
of
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 their
offsprings
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 owing to the exposure
of
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 globalisation.
Additionally
,
earing
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earning
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 high wages, white -
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collar
coller
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college
 workers of developing
countries
aremovinf
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are moving
 to
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richest nations
orchestrations
richestnations
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 and
thus
 they can
earnhefty
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earn hefty
sum
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a sum
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 of money
at
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in
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 the middle age of
life
.
For instance
, a survey
was
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conducted by the
indian
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Indian
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 government in 2015, found that 60.23%
multi talented
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 employees have achieved citizenship
of
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in
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united
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the united
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 states.
Hence
,
technology
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 changes have
great
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 contribution
towards
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 migration. Shifting towards the solution,
Firstly
, a plethora of jobs should be generated within the developing
countries
, taxes money should be spent to make
life
 convenient
of
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for
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 their citizens.
Also
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 reputed professions must be given top priority in the job sector and old various of things should be improved. In conclusion, the trend of migration is mushrooming drastically in the
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fast-paced
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fast paced
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 era and neither individual
and
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nor their sons and daughters want to live
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in
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under developed
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underdeveloped
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countries
. I admit that both government and their citizens should step
to
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forward to lessons
this
 hurdler.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Brain drain
  • Skilled labor
  • Developed nations
  • Essential services
  • Healthcare
  • Education
  • Economic impact
  • Social impact
  • Migration
  • Inequality
  • Disparity
  • Foreign aid
  • Investment
  • Community
  • Dependency
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