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Some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy?

#people #life #money
Nowadays, most of
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population
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happiness
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money
. Because they have to work so hard to earn for primary needs.
For those
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 who
have
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lack
of
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money
 suddenly
wins
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the
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 huge amount of lottery ticket
he
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 will get happier. Those
you
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who
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 already have enough
money
they
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find
happiness
with
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in
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 being their kids,
having
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 a quench talk with their elders.
Mostly
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 people with lots of
money
seems
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 happy and cheerful
,
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because they
dont
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don't
 have to worry
for
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 the future, they are financially so capable that
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any type
anytype
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any type
 of situation
arise
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 they will handle it without any issues. They live their life by owning luxurious cars, for shopping they visit
to
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expensive Brand stores and for holidays they go abroad. Like
this
money
make
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 people happy. Analysing the statement,
their
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 are
various
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a various
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thing
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things
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 apart from
money
 in life to make people happy. Many peoples like to help a needy person and give a
voluntery
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voluntary
volunteer
 service in old age home or
orphangage
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orphanage
 home. They get internal
happiness
 and
satification
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satisfaction
 because they are giving something to society , giving
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something
somthing
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something
 to
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others
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other
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others
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 is
also
 one type of
happiness
for instance
 if you go to
old
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 age home you sit with them hear what they say give them support make them happy.
This
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what
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 you gave to them and you did a social service for you to become happy. To conclude , no doubt
money
is indeed require
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is indeed required
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 to become happy, on that if you have
earn
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earned
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 from
the
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society
than
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then
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 you have
also
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society
for
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your inner peace and
happiness
 which you will never get with
money
.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial security
  • Basic needs
  • Comfort
  • Luxury
  • Freedom
  • Altruistic
  • Philanthropy
  • Nurturing relationships
  • Fulfillment
  • Sense of accomplishment
  • Physical well-being
  • Spiritual beliefs
  • Community involvement
  • Gratitude
  • Mindfulness
  • Simple pleasures
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