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Smacking children is the best form of discipline. To which extent do you agree or disagree?

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Despite many guidelines and books about parenting, there is no single method that all
parents
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 can agree to, including the right way to discipline their
children
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. Some people believe that hitting or smacking will be beneficial in raising their
children
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.
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 essay will argue why using physical
violence
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 to punish
children
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 is completely unacceptable. Even though
this
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 practice has started to lose popularity in recent years, some people still consider corporal punishment as the best way to instil discipline in their
children
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. When
children
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 are not doing what they are being told to do, they are taught to
fear
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 the consequence, which is the pain inflicted by hitting them. It is hoped that the
fear
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 of pain would have a long-lasting effect on the
children
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 so they will be more obedient. Some people believe that spanking or slapping their
children
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 does not only generate
fear
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 but
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parents
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.
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, I believe that corporal punishment should be abolished altogether. More often than not, it creates strained parent-child relationships.
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 of fearing the consequences of their actions,
children
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fear
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 their
parents
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, which in long term can dissolve a loving and caring relationship that they previously had. Based on a lot of research,
violence
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 during childhood can induce many mental health problems, intergenerational trauma and
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violence
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 in later years. It is proven that
children
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 that were repeatedly hit when they were young, would
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 hit their
children
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 when they become
parents
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.
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, it is important to stop the cycle of abuse now. In conclusion, I believe that physical
violence
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 toward
children
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 should not be done regardless of the reasons. They are many ways to teach kids
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how to behave without having to hit them,
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 as talking and giving rewards.
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