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2. Prison is the common way in most countries to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people a better education. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that putting
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 in prison is now the familiar way to address the problem of
crime
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 in most countries
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 a number of
people
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 believe that better
education
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 is more efficient in solving
crime
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 issues. From my stance, imprisoning
criminals
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 is a more acceptable way than just equipping
people
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 with enough
education
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. In
this
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 essay, I will delve deep into both arguments and give out my logical conclusion. On the one hand, there is a school of thought agreeing that
education
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 is a powerful tool to tackle the issue of
crime
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. To elucidate,
people
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 supporting
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 point of view believe that when equipped with knowledge about aspects of laws, inhabitants would be able to distinguish between right and wrong things.
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, citizens can be aware of what they do and avoid committing crimes.
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,
education
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 may not be an effective way to solve
crime
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 issues as in nations where most
people
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 are educated
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 as America, there are still a lot of
criminals
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.
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, I would argue that putting
criminals
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 behind bars is necessary as
education
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 is not enough to tackle the problem of
crime
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. To clarify, not only do
people
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 who are lacking in
education
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 commit crimes but highly educated
people
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 are
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criminals
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.
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, there are managers working in the bank who embezzle thousands of dollars or hackers who break into banks’ databases and steal money. Albeit being educated enough to recognize their illegal activities, they still do these activities because of their greed.
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, a deterrent
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 as imprisoning
criminals
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 is vital in order to address the issue of
crime
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. In conclusion, I believe that prison sentences are one essential weapon in the fight against
crime
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, and I disagree that providing better
education
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 alone is a more effective solution to reducing the
crime
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 rate.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tackles root causes
  • preventative approach
  • critical thinking
  • decision-making skills
  • recidivism rates
  • equipping
  • socio-economic benefits
  • underlying factors
  • poverty
  • ignorance
  • lack of opportunities
  • rehabilitation
  • ineffective
  • higher rates of re-offending
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