Some employers offer their employees subsidised membership of gyms and sports clubs, believing that this will make their staff healthier and thus more effective at work. Other employers see no benefit in doing so.

Nowadays companies or employers try to encourage their staff through different types of offers like providing subsidised participation and so on. While other groups of people believe that it has no benefits for them.
This
essay sheds light on both views and a conclusion will be given in the forthcoming
paragraphes
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paragraphs
. To commence with, membership
of
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any
sports
center
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is beneficial for
employees
in many ways. Workers who have abilities
of playing
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sports
but
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due
dur
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due
to lack
of
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experience and equipment
they
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did not do. So,
this
will provide them
an
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opportunity to play. There are chances that
employees
may play well and reach
at
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international
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the international
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competition which could beneficial for
company
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the company
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. Healthy and fit body satisfied
employees
and it
also
increase
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strength
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the strength
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of working in
employees
that is
helpful for
achieveing
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achieving
target of
company
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the company
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. On
other hand
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, the most significant and major thing is that providing membership
of
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sports
club
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clubs
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might distract workers from their job and work which may result in
drastic
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decline in work output.
Furthermore
, there are many
employees
who are not interested in any
sport
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game or exercise that will no
useful
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for them.
Employees
are interested in financial rewards,
bonuses
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and bonuses
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which could improve their lifestyle.
In addition
, offers like
on the job
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training or day release programmes help
employees
to improve their knowledge and could be innovative
that
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is beneficial for
company
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the company
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and
employees
could get better chances to improve their post in
company
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the company
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. For
an
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example, a record from CNC newspaper 45.7%
employees
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are
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attracted by
offer
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offers
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regarding financial rewards. To conclude, there
are
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is
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no disadvantage to
offer
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offering
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job training but
subsidise
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subsidising
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membership
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the membership
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of
sports
clubs do have
negative
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a negative
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impact on
company
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the company
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.
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