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Some people believe that governments should pay for healthcare and education, but others disagree with this opinion. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Education
 and health facilities are fundamental rights for every citizen of the
nation
 as mentioned in the constitution of India. Most developed nations do provide these facilities to the
nation
 as rights of citizens. While it is the topic of debate among some people, whether it should be sponsored by the
government
 or not. I will try to discuss both views in the upcoming paragraphs.
Education
 and healthcare facilities provided by the
government
 are the rebate, which is given to the people of the country for the taxes they pay.
Furthermore
, e
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 person cannot afford high-level
education
 and health services in reputed places.
Therefore
, it becomes the duty of authorities to maintain the equilibrium among the
nation
.
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 is not among the highest taxpayers like businessmen or the administrator, but they are playing a crucial role in the working of the country. While some believe that it is a burden on the state, so
government
 shouldn't pay for these primary things. In the perspective of India, the taxpayers are very less compared to the population of the country,
therefore
 it will be an unfortunate load on the
nation
's economy. There are many subsidies running in the name of a below-par community like a rationing scheme where food grains is given to poor people at minimised rates, and starting new facility for
education
 and healthcare will be added to the list. To conclude, the fundamental services should be driven to all the
nation
,
besides
 it can be a load on the
government
 if it doesn't have a sufficient amount of taxes and income sources. In my perspective, the collection of taxes and other income sources should be maintained and these primary services should be availed to every citizen of the
nation
.
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