Some people say that computer have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. Discuss and give your opinion.

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The word computer has become a household name across the globe in the 21st century. The usage of
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has rapidly risen from 2000 in India and ever since
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has become very essential and important part of everyone day to day work. The usage of
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has brought a revolution in all forms of sectors ,especially in the fields of education, software and banking sectors. In the present ,
situation
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nearly 90% of the
works
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are
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carried out on
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computers
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shows how
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society has adopted
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technology in their respective fields.
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, I would like to give my opinion on how
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latest
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life
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easier and more convenient for people working in the banking sector.Back in the 1980's the
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Prime Minister of India, Smt. Indira Gandhi
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nationalized the banks across the country and she emphasized
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using
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in the baking sector. In early 2000 ninety
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of the banks in India
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adopted the digital banking system and which helped them to provide more transparent, convenient and efficient services to their loyal customers.The usage of
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has brought
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at
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the
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door step
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of
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customers where they can easily access
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their
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by sitting at home. Apart from the positive side of
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digital ,
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there are some disadvantages that I would like to express my views where the employee faces difficulty while working on
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machine. As I mentioned earlier everything is in our lap to operate but most
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software employees are working in
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a stressful environment
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where they need to carry their laptops with them wherever they go and
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kills their private
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and
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affects their professional
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, in my opinion
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has really made
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easier
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people in saving their time and bringing the world to their doorstep to access all kinds of things that are available globally.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • Automation
  • Productivity
  • Access to information
  • Troubleshooting
  • Overload
  • Dependency
  • Essential skills
  • Abundance
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